Showing posts with label Remembrance Day. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Remembrance Day. Show all posts

Wednesday, November 09, 2011

Show Don't Tell!

In class today, we discussed "Show Don't Tell" strategies. Students are becoming more aware of how to write a text without listing words and emotions while adding deeper descriptions. We also went over what similes and metaphors are.

Here's what they did today on the subject:


Happy (students 2, 10, 21, 23)
Standing at the top of the mountain, feeling the thrills rush through me, I am looking down at all the tiny skiers below. As I pick up speed I smile as I go off the jump laughing freely and cry out “Yeah!” in mid air. While I speed down the mountain I feel like I am leaving all my stress and worries behind. No matter how tired I am, this moment couldn't be more amazing.
 

Sad (students 1, 7, 14, 17)
We are in the outskirt of Germany in 1941. I was standing in the middle of the battlefield, as I reach into my pocket and pulled out a picture of my wife. My heart fell a thousand feet as I thought of her. Tear drops flowed down my cheeks and dropped off my chin like a raindrop slowly trickling down a flower petal.

Fearful / Scared (students 5, 19, 22, 25)
I started backing up. My heart was pounding. Sweat was pouring down my face. I gathered my courage, put my hand on the doorknob and went in.

Mad (students 4, 9, 20, 24)
Jeremy stomps up to his room. With no hesitation, he kicks his door wide open. Feeling a rush of adrenaline, he leaps onto his bed, and starts punching his pillow, like a boxer punching his punching bag. He growls at it. His heart starts speeding up, faster, and faster. He's out of breath.

Lonely (students 6, 12, 26, 28)
I felt like I was the only person stranded on Earth. Everyone had died. I had no help whatsoever. So many questions were on my mind, but nobody could answer them.

Excited (students 8, 11, 15, 27)
My heart raced, I could not wait. I jumped up and down like a startled rabbit. My eyes gleamed with tears of relief. I would see my family soon, I was going home.

The man couldn't wait to go home...

Shy (students 3, 13, 18)
I wish I were a ghost. In a room full of vacant stares, a wave of humility washes over me.



 
On a different note, there is a Remembrance Day assembly tomorrow after recess. Division 3 students' work will be displayed on the walls near the entrance of the gym. You should come, it will be worth it!

See you tomorrow (I hope)!